Saturday, February 19, 2005

Lead sentence cliffhanger

How's this for an opener in the Sunday NYT magazine article on the Iraqi Kurds? [No link yet]
There were two days left before election day, and Gen. Rostam Hamid Rahim, guerilla war hero and a member of Iraqi Kurdistan's regional Parliament since 1992, was determined that every Kurd vote.

Every Kurd vote what? Eat flesh?

Paging the copy desk.

UPDATE: The wife suggests that this sentence is fine, and after re-reading it, I think she's right. Nevertheless, I still think it's awkward. Maybe it would have been better to say "...was determined to get every Kurd to the polls."

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