Saturday, February 19, 2005
Lead sentence cliffhanger
How's this for an opener in the Sunday NYT magazine article on the Iraqi Kurds? [No link yet]
Every Kurd vote what? Eat flesh?
Paging the copy desk.
UPDATE: The wife suggests that this sentence is fine, and after re-reading it, I think she's right. Nevertheless, I still think it's awkward. Maybe it would have been better to say "...was determined to get every Kurd to the polls."
There were two days left before election day, and Gen. Rostam Hamid Rahim, guerilla war hero and a member of Iraqi Kurdistan's regional Parliament since 1992, was determined that every Kurd vote.
Every Kurd vote what? Eat flesh?
Paging the copy desk.
UPDATE: The wife suggests that this sentence is fine, and after re-reading it, I think she's right. Nevertheless, I still think it's awkward. Maybe it would have been better to say "...was determined to get every Kurd to the polls."
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